On the bridge.
With a swampy cheeseburger."
It's exactly what I was looking for in the opening lines of my SciFi project. Succinct. To the point. Slightly esoteric. Nerdy. A little weird.
It's perfect. Won't change it for anything.
I never paid much attention to opening lines until I heard Stephen King talk about them.
There are all sorts of theories and ideas about what constitutes a good opening line. It's tricky thing, and tough to talk about because I don't think conceptually while I work on a first draft -- I just write. To get scientific about it is a little like trying to catch moonbeams in a jar.
But there's one thing I'm sure about. An opening line should invite the reader to begin the story. It should say: Listen. Come in here. You want to know about this.
~ Stephen King
As this project was conceived as a comic book I was far more interested in the opening image than in the opening lines. That's why I like that they're a little strange. I would like the first image to do all the talking.
This image is a preliminary artist rendering of Titan in one of her spacesuits. Her desire for a perfect cheeseburger will quickly become a parallel for her looking for something she can't find. But she will continue looking.
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